高考英语满分作文及名师评析

新课标高考英语满分作文及名师评析 <br />【全国卷 I 海南、宁夏】 <br />　　【试题回放】假定你是李华，正在英国接受英语培训，住在一户 <br />英国人家里。今天你的房东 Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你准备外出，请给 <br />Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条，内容包括： <br />　　1．外出购物 <br />　　2．替房东还书 <br />　　3．Tracy 来电话留言：1）咖啡屋（Bolton Coffee）见面取消 <br />　　2）此事已告知 Susan <br />　　3) 尽快回电 <br />　　注意：1. 词数 100 左右； 　　 <br />2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 <br />　　Mrs. Wilson, <br />　　I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I <br />have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City <br />Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she <br />couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has <br />something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said <br />that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to <br />call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about <br />this change. <br />　　Yours, <br />　　Li Hua <br />　　 <br />　　[名师点评] 本文属于提纲式要点作文，是学生比较熟悉的题材， <br />体现了英语学习应该注意实用性，生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运 <br />用恰当、准确，各个要点间逻辑连贯，行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不 <br />是简单的逐条翻译，而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语 <br />句，因此要仔细组织语言，合理安排结构。在语言方面，要特别注意 <br />简洁明了，开头要开门见山。 <br />【北京卷】 <br />　　【试题回放】情景作文 <br />　　假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召， <br />你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植 <br />树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的&ldquo;绿色行动&rdquo;专栏写一篇以&ldquo;Green <br />Action in Our Class&rdquo;为题的英文稿件。 <br />　　注意：词数不少于 60 <br />　　提示词：郊区 suburbs <br />　　April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful <br />experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to <br />plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to <br />work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and <br />planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, <br />we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving <br />we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, <br />we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and <br />beautify our environment. <br />　　【名师点评】 <br />　　本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文，与环保结合，立意较好。文 <br />章思路清晰，要点连贯，在语言的表达上选词新颖，同时运用了分词 <br />短语作状语等较好的句式表达。 <br /> <br />　　【北京卷】 <br />　　【试题回放】开放作文 <br />　　请根据下面提示，写一篇短文，词数不少于 50 <br />　　In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following <br />picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you <br />understand it. <br />　　What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, <br />is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way <br />as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the <br />noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, <br />for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the to...